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It is funny how my mind treats me sometimes. I find myself blowing the dust of my guitar. Thinking about being a teenager again, singing songs, writing poems, listening to the sadness music I used to enjoy so bad. No darkness issues passing by. No thoughts. No problems. Just my guitar, my notes and my bedroom full of books I have to read someday. It is like living through a freeway, travelling faster than the speed of light, without moving a muscle. Living one fragment at a time. Breathing slowly. Thinking of nothing. Dying peacefully.
Wasting time.
That's why, sometimes, I’m glad of feeling pain. It makes me feel alive in a way that happiness will never be able to. Maybe I'm so bitter. Maybe I’m so child. But, sometimes, when I feel the pain coming over me, I know I am an important part of the universe. A piece of everything and nothing. Just a particle of God experiencing everything.
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Text added on 06-11-2005, 110 hits. (5 votes)
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2006-01-07 22:59:52 |
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The pain of being alive... sounds pretty much sincere. walker |
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2005-11-14 17:43:21 |
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"Just a particle of God experiencing everything. " I love this sentence, it's beautiful!
Congratulations and 5*.
Mt.
entreolvidos |
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2005-11-12 03:23:13 |
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It sounds like some sort of Panteism... Except that I ain't decided yet if from above this comment or just below it... orlandoteran |
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2005-11-09 18:22:05 |
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What do you mean by despite Gaius observations?
You have progressed so much with your English that you forgot the meaning of the sentence Muy bueno tu texto.
Think about this: If his story had been badly written I wouldn't have wasted my time reading it from beginning to end, much less giving him helping tips.
Somehow I think it means I should stop trying to help out and better shut up.
But, believe me, honestly, I don't do it in the hope others will think I am so talented....It should be easy to understand, reading my material, that I don't give a hoot about what people might think about me.
GAIUS |
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2005-11-07 23:56:27 |
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Wow!! I love this thought. Curiously the first time I'd listened the concept, was to my ex wife. "Pain let me knows I'm alive" she saids. I felt a revolution within me at that time. Pain is not only acceptable, is also desirable! In a documentary film, I saw a doctor explaing that in cases of accidents or war wounds, when death is near, the body stops feeling pain. But you go beyond of the merely circumstantial to feel your self being a "particle of God experiencing everything". A powerful thought, and very well written also, despite Gaius observations. *****
malomo |
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2005-11-07 19:14:07 |
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But, sometimes, when I feel the pain coming over me, I know I am an important part of the universe.... ufff Sometimes I'm so important... Aniuxa |
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2005-11-07 01:14:30 |
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It makes me feel alive in a way that happiness will never provide (equate, achieve, be able to).
El verbo TO CAN solo tiene presente y pasado.
Del futuro en adelante se usa la forma Be able to.
En español el verbo poder cubre las posibilidades y las capacidades.
En Inglés no.
El verbo TO CAN solo se usa para las posibilidades. Para la mentalidad anglosajona podré usando el verbo TO CAN no tiene sentido. Podré usando Will be able to es más lógico.
En los foros pondré una explicación más detallada de esto.
Muy bueno tu texto. Considerando que estás escribiendo en un segundo idioma tuviste muy pocos errores de sintaxis y semántica. Felicitaciones.
Van mis estrellas.
Some other members told me to put these tips in Spanish, not in English.
GAIUS |
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